So I finally decided to take a look at Mariah's paper from her website, since I don't want to grade the papers I have piled up.
Here are my impressions:
1. THE BLANK SPACE! My god, was there a length requirement? I've never seen that amount of blank space in a college paper, much less a grad school one. Which leads me to . . .
2. WHAT STYLE IS THAT? It's not APA style, that's for sure, and that's what Social Workers use, according to Professor Google. The reference style is all wrong, and what's worse she has a direct quote in her paper with no citation (page number etc) to say where she got it from, which in my class would automatically earn her a zero for plagiarism. I did run her paper through TurnItIn, which monitors plagiarism, and her papers shares parts of sentences with lots of other papers, but not enough for me to ding her for that.
3. HELLO, PUNCTUATION? She is all over the map with this. Lots of commas, even where they aren't needed, and many used when a colon or semicolon or other mark would work better.
4. PROOFREADING IS YOUR FRIEND. Ye gods but there are poorly written sentences here! I would recommend she read it out loud and see if it makes sense to someone who is not familiar with the paper (or the subject for that matter). I am finding it difficult to get through a sentence without having to stop and review the sentence to see what the hell she's trying to say.
I'm sure there's more, but I'm bailing. She doesn't write as poorly as my first-year students often do, but it's not grad-level either. If it didn't earn a zero for improper citation, I'd probably give it a low B for my first- and second-year students. It'd get handed back with an "Are you effing kidding me? Do it over correctly." for a grad student, if I was feeling generous.